Oh Sachien some lovely spooky vocab, what a shame your sentence structure make this confusing; I know you want to create tension but you still need to include clear sentences. I did enjoy reading this but I know you can do better.
I like how you have started of the story with speech
Chetan, 5A
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Oh Sachien some lovely spooky vocab, what a shame your sentence structure make this confusing; I know you want to create tension but you still need to include clear sentences. I did enjoy reading this but I know you can do better.
I like how you have started of the story with speech
Chetan, 5A