you could of checked your spellings and correct them because the way you spelt Bruce Lee wrong because it looks liked that it is pronounced like Browcelee.
You had a great idea to go with the story! I liked how you started by describing the “dark and lonely street”. Your story was quite an adventure with lots of action. The description of when you “heard the creepy footsteps” built suspense. I was so surprised when Bruce Lee showed up to help your character and friends. I felt frightened at the end when everyone was chased and so sad when the best, best friend was taken. The picture prompt inspired you.
You are good storyteller! When you write your story down, read it from the eyes of a new reader. For example, look at the sentence that begins with “The footsteps were muggers…”. How could you separate this long sentence into more than one so that it will be clear and exciting to the reader?
you could of checked your spellings and correct them because the way you spelt Bruce Lee wrong because it looks liked that it is pronounced like Browcelee.
HI NASEEM !
THIS IS A GREAT SPOOKEY STORY. HOWEVER MY NAME NEEDS A CAPITAL LETTER BECAUSE ITS PART OF LITERACY. HOWEVER IT IS A GRAT STORY. I GOT REAL SCared
Hello Naseem,
You had a great idea to go with the story! I liked how you started by describing the “dark and lonely street”. Your story was quite an adventure with lots of action. The description of when you “heard the creepy footsteps” built suspense. I was so surprised when Bruce Lee showed up to help your character and friends. I felt frightened at the end when everyone was chased and so sad when the best, best friend was taken. The picture prompt inspired you.
You are good storyteller! When you write your story down, read it from the eyes of a new reader. For example, look at the sentence that begins with “The footsteps were muggers…”. How could you separate this long sentence into more than one so that it will be clear and exciting to the reader?