Sachien, you have some fab ideas here and are making good use of varied sentence lengths to draw me in. Make sure all the words fit the context and make sense in the sentence you have written.
Miss A
This is a very dramatic piece of writing! I like your use of inverted commas for the character thinking. I think you need a comma rather than a full stop after ‘the stone cat.’
If you have time, please take a look at our year 4 story ideas blogs- Paris and Madrid. We are trying out ideas for story plans, and character descriptions.
Here is a link, check with your teacher first though! http://mead-primary-school.j2webby.com/?cat=9
Thanks,
Mrs Coop, Mead
Sachien, you have some fab ideas here and are making good use of varied sentence lengths to draw me in. Make sure all the words fit the context and make sense in the sentence you have written.
Miss A
This is a very dramatic piece of writing! I like your use of inverted commas for the character thinking. I think you need a comma rather than a full stop after ‘the stone cat.’
If you have time, please take a look at our year 4 story ideas blogs- Paris and Madrid. We are trying out ideas for story plans, and character descriptions.
Here is a link, check with your teacher first though!
http://mead-primary-school.j2webby.com/?cat=9
Thanks,
Mrs Coop, Mead