Hi Annais. I assume that Alima and Tea are the friends you would miss. It is nice that they are able to enjoy the trip with you, however, I don’t know who or what Ratheena is and how you were saved . I would have liked a little more detail about Ratheena and if you ever arrived in Mexico. Also, your story starts in the present tense and ends in the past tense.
Wow Annais! I like how you have made a dramatic ending to your story! I hope there is a next part! I like how you have added Ratheena, Tea and Alima to your story!
From Sara. 🙂
Hi Annais. I assume that Alima and Tea are the friends you would miss. It is nice that they are able to enjoy the trip with you, however, I don’t know who or what Ratheena is and how you were saved . I would have liked a little more detail about Ratheena and if you ever arrived in Mexico. Also, your story starts in the present tense and ends in the past tense.
Wow Annais! I like how you have made a dramatic ending to your story! I hope there is a next part! I like how you have added Ratheena, Tea and Alima to your story!
From Sara. 🙂
well done annais for describing your feelings but more adjectives