Oh no, your poor horse! Well done Imaan, I love the way you used description and feelings to draw me into your sad story.
Next time try to use synonyms to avoid repeating the same word, like horse.
Miss A
Great work Imaan. You painted a vivid picture of the horse and how sad you felt with your words. I particularly loved the phrase ‘dead on the muddy ground’. Well done.
Oh no, your poor horse! Well done Imaan, I love the way you used description and feelings to draw me into your sad story.
Next time try to use synonyms to avoid repeating the same word, like horse.
Miss A
Thanks Miss Anand
Great work Imaan. You painted a vivid picture of the horse and how sad you felt with your words. I particularly loved the phrase ‘dead on the muddy ground’. Well done.
Thank you very much Miss Leary!!:)