This is a very creative piece of writing which really got me thinking. I like stories which get me thinking! I was wondering who the people were and if they had played a trick on you by saying that the fall was just part of a movie and therefore safe. I was also wondering about the shark, why could it speak? Why was it shooting at you? Also, was your mum dead (‘in a better place’) and what had happened to her? There are a lot of ‘hooks’ in this writing to get the reader interested.
It may be a good idea to ask someone to read through your work through before you publish, just to check that the punctuation is correct.
This is a very creative piece of writing which really got me thinking. I like stories which get me thinking! I was wondering who the people were and if they had played a trick on you by saying that the fall was just part of a movie and therefore safe. I was also wondering about the shark, why could it speak? Why was it shooting at you? Also, was your mum dead (‘in a better place’) and what had happened to her? There are a lot of ‘hooks’ in this writing to get the reader interested.
It may be a good idea to ask someone to read through your work through before you publish, just to check that the punctuation is correct.
Keep up the good work!
Mrs Evans (Team 100wc)