my ultimate adventure

This entry was posted in 6G&5B. Bookmark the permalink.

One Response to my ultimate adventure

  1. gandz says:

    A very good piece of writing Zia, your work has really improved. You have used lots of description and your writing painted a picture in y head. You have also used some synonyms EG: Kill – Murder. You have varied your sentence structure and even used commas so your reader knows when or not to pause during your writing. Just check your spellings. Keep up the good work. :p
    Zaeem:)

Leave a Reply

Your email address will not be published. Required fields are marked *