Hey Somran, I like your story it is amazing with the variation of short sentences and interesting words. Remember that myself is one word. Good use of advanced punctuation such as brackets. Maybe you can add more descriptive words to create more atmosphere in the story. Well Done!
From Sara :))
Ibrahim 3j I like the story a lot and now I don’t wear gucci glasses. 🙂
Hello Ibrahim,
thank you for your comment hope you enjoyed my story! 🙂 :p
wow !
I like how you started of with speech and gave it a open introduction.
keep up the good work!:)
From:Imaan.Janjua
I loved your story somran and you used amazing words like bang and I like that you used adjectives
=Amina
Hey Somran, I like your story it is amazing with the variation of short sentences and interesting words. Remember that myself is one word. Good use of advanced punctuation such as brackets. Maybe you can add more descriptive words to create more atmosphere in the story. Well Done!
From Sara :))
Hi
somran I like your story a lot and you have used a lot of adjectives keep up the good work.
Hey Sara,
Thank you for your helpful comments
I will use your advice in the future!