Well done Serena, I really like the way you built up the tension in this and left me wanting more. Next time think about varying your sentence structures and using more devices like the ‘dead flies in webs’ to create an atmosphere for your reader.
Miss A
Well done Serena, I really like the way you built up the tension in this and left me wanting more. Next time think about varying your sentence structures and using more devices like the ‘dead flies in webs’ to create an atmosphere for your reader.
Miss A