How creepy is this? I was hooked from the start. You put the five words in really naturally and I like how you highlighted them. The title is gripping. I’m never going into a maze again!
-Holly
P.s If you want to see mine, go to http://holly283.primaryblogger.co.uk/2015/04/30/the-dream-100wc/
Thanks!
Hello!
I come from Mead primary school and I am in year 6.
I like your work, especially the part when you said “so i danced along”, which made me giggle. Do you like cornflakes? Sounds like you are a WALKING DEAD fan!
Hi Serena, I really like your story, I got hooked from the start of your story, and I really like your title. But you should check your work such as spellings; excited, to. and your capital letter at “Find your way out..”
How creepy is this? I was hooked from the start. You put the five words in really naturally and I like how you highlighted them. The title is gripping. I’m never going into a maze again!
-Holly
P.s If you want to see mine, go to http://holly283.primaryblogger.co.uk/2015/04/30/the-dream-100wc/
Thanks!
Hello!
I come from Mead primary school and I am in year 6.
I like your work, especially the part when you said “so i danced along”, which made me giggle. Do you like cornflakes? Sounds like you are a WALKING DEAD fan!
From Billy at Mead Primary
Hello!
I come from Mead Primary School and I am in year 6. Your paragraph is really interesting!
I would like to see you use a simile next time.
From David at Mead Primary
Hi Serena, I really like your story, I got hooked from the start of your story, and I really like your title. But you should check your work such as spellings; excited, to. and your capital letter at “Find your way out..”
Karolina 😉
Hey Serena ultra scary story you created there it really shook my bones
Please please keep writing. I can’t wait for more work
Jayanna