very good detail Karolina, check out for capital letters and make sure you read out your story so there is no mistakes. Missing you already, good luck in your new school! =)
I really enjoyed your writing, & the use of description as the story developed. Next time, try and describe your characters in different ways. For example, some of the ‘Falcons’ could’ve changed for
‘the gigantic bird’
or ‘
the fearsome predator’
or
‘the frightening beast’
This would make it less repetitive for the person reading it.
Keep up the good work.
very good detail Karolina, check out for capital letters and make sure you read out your story so there is no mistakes. Missing you already, good luck in your new school! =)
I really enjoyed your writing, & the use of description as the story developed. Next time, try and describe your characters in different ways. For example, some of the ‘Falcons’ could’ve changed for
‘the gigantic bird’
or ‘
the fearsome predator’
or
‘the frightening beast’
This would make it less repetitive for the person reading it.
Keep up the good work.