WOW! What’s going to happen next ? I hope the baby eagle doesn’t eat her or she doesn’t shout at the small eagle. Great background of the story , like it. I like how you used speech to make it more real and make the reader actually hear the sound in their imagination.
By your best freind, Janna
Love the simile at the end buddy, that was really powerful. Try using adverbials for how the verbs happen to really paint a picture of how the action is happening.
For example:
Soared peacefully
Or
Rampaged violently.
WOW! What’s going to happen next ? I hope the baby eagle doesn’t eat her or she doesn’t shout at the small eagle. Great background of the story , like it. I like how you used speech to make it more real and make the reader actually hear the sound in their imagination.
By your best freind, Janna
Love the simile at the end buddy, that was really powerful. Try using adverbials for how the verbs happen to really paint a picture of how the action is happening.
For example:
Soared peacefully
Or
Rampaged violently.
Keep up the good work!