Hi Harry
I liked your story a lot, I really liked the way you changed the angle on the headline of your story. It is well described, and although your punctuation lets your story down a little bit, this can be practised.
I really felt that you were in the movie, and I loved the way you spoke to the crow at the end. I hope he was nice!
Harry, hi
well done for use past tent next time
try use capertel . 🙂
Hi Harry
I liked your story a lot, I really liked the way you changed the angle on the headline of your story. It is well described, and although your punctuation lets your story down a little bit, this can be practised.
I really felt that you were in the movie, and I loved the way you spoke to the crow at the end. I hope he was nice!
Sent from Grantham, Lincolnshire