I love the shrinking in this piece of writing! I also love the way you structured your sentences to show this. You used a question at the end to engage the reader which is always good. Just remember to keep writing from the same point of view all the time – you swapped into 3rd person right at the end. Keep up with the great writing though – I enjoyed reading it!
I love the shrinking in this piece of writing! I also love the way you structured your sentences to show this. You used a question at the end to engage the reader which is always good. Just remember to keep writing from the same point of view all the time – you swapped into 3rd person right at the end. Keep up with the great writing though – I enjoyed reading it!