Hello Zainab. I really enjoyed your writing this week – though I found the colour of the font made it a little difficult for my old eyse to read! I thought that ‘pervaded’ was a very powerful verb to use here and liked that you left your reader wondering what would happen next. Perhaps you could have finished with an ellipsis … Well done and keep on writing!
Mrs Ower
Marbella, Spain
Hello Zainab. I really enjoyed your writing this week – though I found the colour of the font made it a little difficult for my old eyse to read! I thought that ‘pervaded’ was a very powerful verb to use here and liked that you left your reader wondering what would happen next. Perhaps you could have finished with an ellipsis … Well done and keep on writing!
Mrs Ower
Marbella, Spain