Hello, Arafah. I loved your idea of the girl saving her village from that giant crow! Next time, you could think about other ways to make your story flow instead of repeating ‘then’. For instance, you might use time connectives like ‘first’ or ‘finally’. Thank you for sharing your writing this week on 100WC, and keep up the good work!
Mrs Ower
Marbella, Spain
Hello, Arafah. I loved your idea of the girl saving her village from that giant crow! Next time, you could think about other ways to make your story flow instead of repeating ‘then’. For instance, you might use time connectives like ‘first’ or ‘finally’. Thank you for sharing your writing this week on 100WC, and keep up the good work!
Mrs Ower
Marbella, Spain