Hello,
Thank you for sharing your creative story about Ginger and her adventure!
I can see that you have really focussed on including descriptive phrases such as the two similes to describe the character’s heart and temperature.
I would suggest that you re read your writing to check where sentences should begin and end, so that this helps the reader to follow the story. Perhaps a friend could help by reading back your writing to you so you can hear where sentences should end.
I look forward to reading future blog posts by you as you clearly enjoy writing!
Best wishes,
Mrs Ward
KOBPS, Lincolnshire
Hello,
Thank you for sharing your creative story about Ginger and her adventure!
I can see that you have really focussed on including descriptive phrases such as the two similes to describe the character’s heart and temperature.
I would suggest that you re read your writing to check where sentences should begin and end, so that this helps the reader to follow the story. Perhaps a friend could help by reading back your writing to you so you can hear where sentences should end.
I look forward to reading future blog posts by you as you clearly enjoy writing!
Best wishes,
Mrs Ward
KOBPS, Lincolnshire