Great stuff Arjan, you used detail to place your hero in the world of myths and legends and introduce him to your reader. Remember to use apostrophes to show possession.
Mrs M
Hi Arjan. I really enjoyed reading your story, you have used lots of descriptive words which paint a complete picture of the thoughts inside your head. Great imagination. Mrs Mc. D
Great stuff Arjan, you used detail to place your hero in the world of myths and legends and introduce him to your reader. Remember to use apostrophes to show possession.
Mrs M
Hi Arjan. I really enjoyed reading your story, you have used lots of descriptive words which paint a complete picture of the thoughts inside your head. Great imagination. Mrs Mc. D
I really like your post it is really descriptive
maybe you could use apostrophes
Thanks Mrs McDermott
Arjan
I like your description but add the punctuation in the right place
PUNCTUATION man !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
But real good story line
By the famous writer of Vankhandhu
Arjan was really impressive.great
imagination.
From Arjan’s mum
Arjan has great imagination .
Arjan’s mum
Wind sounds powerful. How does he control all weather? Make sure you proof read your work. You might be able to spot some errors and correct them.