jervarnes story

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5 Responses to jervarnes story

  1. dousj says:

    :)=I like the way you made your own Mythological and Historical world and made it sound real.
    :)=I like the question at the end who makes everyone think
    Wish=Punctuation

  2. beguh1 says:

    STAR: YOU USED REALLY GOOD DESCRIPTIVE WRITING WITH GOOD PUNCTUATION
    You used a lot of mythical language like decades etc.

    Wish: Maybe use different word than supreme ( even though it’s a good word)

  3. dhang says:

    That is amazing jevarne I like how you used suspense at the end to improve maybe use more adjectives

  4. ranaz1 says:

    I love the description

    Maybe add a comma so I can take a breath

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