Hi Kerem,
This is a marvellous start to your myth, I love the way you used precise language to create an impression in your reader’s mind and used interesting detail to place your story clearly in the world of mythology. Next time remember to check all your verbs are in the past.
So can’t wait to find out what happens next.
Mrs M
Hello there,
Oh my, you have wonderful control over language and have used some beautiful imagery to really draw me into your story; the sign of a talented writer! I can see some missing capitals , remember to check for these.
I hope Narathast manages to save us all from the apocalypse!
English Advisor
Manchester
Hi Kerem,
This is a marvellous start to your myth, I love the way you used precise language to create an impression in your reader’s mind and used interesting detail to place your story clearly in the world of mythology. Next time remember to check all your verbs are in the past.
So can’t wait to find out what happens next.
Mrs M
Hello there,
Oh my, you have wonderful control over language and have used some beautiful imagery to really draw me into your story; the sign of a talented writer! I can see some missing capitals , remember to check for these.
I hope Narathast manages to save us all from the apocalypse!
English Advisor
Manchester