Brilliant Zaynab! This is a wonderful way to open your myth! I love the way you used great descriptive devices to draw me into your story and influence my opinion. Now try to think about how you can use punctuation to influence your reader.
Can’t wait to find out what happens to Blaze.
Mrs M
Hello there,
What a great start to your story; you created an interesting mythological heroine in Blaze and a setting I would like to visit. I can see you missed some punctuation, make sure to check for this as you write.
I wonder what trouble lies ahead in paradise.
English Advisor
Manchester
Brilliant Zaynab! This is a wonderful way to open your myth! I love the way you used great descriptive devices to draw me into your story and influence my opinion. Now try to think about how you can use punctuation to influence your reader.
Can’t wait to find out what happens to Blaze.
Mrs M
Hello there,
What a great start to your story; you created an interesting mythological heroine in Blaze and a setting I would like to visit. I can see you missed some punctuation, make sure to check for this as you write.
I wonder what trouble lies ahead in paradise.
English Advisor
Manchester
An excellent piece of writing that successfully draws the reader into the story, it leaves the reader wanting to know what happens next to Blaze.
Beautiful writing ! Feel extremely proud of my little girl. Keep up the good work.Thankyou Mrs M for guidance and encouragement.