Hi Safaa,
What a fabulous way to introduce your reader to your character and setting! You used detail well to influence my opinion and place your story carefully in the world of myths.
Next time remember to edit before you publish as I can see some errors.
Can’t wait to find out what happens next.
Mrs M
Hello there,
Oh my, what an idyllic ice setting you have created for your reader here and what an interesting heroine! I do hope Isla doesn’t get into too much trouble. As you continue, try to vary the way you start your sentences.
Keep it up.
English Advisor
Manchester
The introduction gives a very strong sense of the place of Icelandia. A very well written piece of work that clearly defines the character of Isla and already makes the reader care about what happens to her.
I like the way you are describing the setting and the story
Hi Safaa,
What a fabulous way to introduce your reader to your character and setting! You used detail well to influence my opinion and place your story carefully in the world of myths.
Next time remember to edit before you publish as I can see some errors.
Can’t wait to find out what happens next.
Mrs M
Hello there,
Oh my, what an idyllic ice setting you have created for your reader here and what an interesting heroine! I do hope Isla doesn’t get into too much trouble. As you continue, try to vary the way you start your sentences.
Keep it up.
English Advisor
Manchester
The introduction gives a very strong sense of the place of Icelandia. A very well written piece of work that clearly defines the character of Isla and already makes the reader care about what happens to her.