Slice the Asgardian warrior

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2 Responses to Slice the Asgardian warrior

  1. nanand says:

    Hi Rakeen,
    I like the way you have opened your myth, using lots of detail to engage your reader and place your story firmly in the world of myths. As you continue, I suggest you always make time for proof- reading as I can spot some errors in your grammar and punctuation.
    Looking forward to hearing about what happens to Slice.
    Mrs M

  2. English Advisor says:

    Hello there,
    This sounds like the start of an interesting and action packed myth, with quite an interesting hero at the helm of the action. As the story continues , make sure that your link between parts and events are clear, using conjunctions may help you with that.
    English Advisor
    Manchester

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