I would love to live their Khalisah to improve maybe add a metephore and personification
star: good use of adjectives and similes and also adding the villain as her sister Wish: call it cold mania because icy Ella is the goddess of ice!
🙂 I like the description of Heather it really paints a picture in my head wish: The Paragraph’s could be bigger 🙂 I like the 2 lines which change the entire coarse of the story entirely
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I would love to live their Khalisah to improve maybe add a metephore and personification
star: good use of adjectives and similes and also adding the villain as her sister
Wish: call it cold mania because icy Ella is the goddess of ice!
🙂 I like the description of Heather it really paints a picture in my head
wish: The Paragraph’s could be bigger
🙂 I like the 2 lines which change the entire coarse of the story entirely