Great work you used you great adjectives and you talked ablut the her background!
(Hafsa’s mum)
Ohn my ! Clovis sounds like quite a formidable beast. Don’t forget to give your reader lots of detail of the battle so they can picture it in their mind. Mrs M
I love your writing I love how you left it on a cliff hanger I just can’t wait to read more it’s brilliant but just watch out for your commas
Great description, i really liked your work and i really liked the way described clovis the red dragon You should try to use commas and clauses….
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Great work you used you great adjectives and you talked ablut the her background!
(Hafsa’s mum)
Ohn my ! Clovis sounds like quite a formidable beast. Don’t forget to give your reader lots of detail of the battle so they can picture it in their mind.
Mrs M
I love your writing I love how you left it on a cliff hanger I just can’t wait to read more it’s brilliant but just watch out for your commas
Great description, i really liked your work and i really liked the way described clovis the red dragon
You should try to use commas and clauses….