I like the way you have described your character but maybe you can start your sentences differently maybe put time connectives overall this was very good.
I like the way you have described your character but maybe you can start your sentences differently maybe put time connectives overall this was very good I really love this Amelie.
who was the creature?
that is a great story
from joanna
The creature was Death is ugly creature and has skin like dry sand
his face is as swollen as a gold fish ate a Medicaid
Thank you for commenting on my peace of work.
By a.k
I like the way you have described your character but maybe you can start your sentences differently maybe put time connectives overall this was very good.
I like the way you have described your character but maybe you can start your sentences differently maybe put time connectives overall this was very good I really love this Amelie.
Hi Amelie,
You continued this story with some really scary detail. Go back and edit , you’re jumping between past and present.
Mrs M
I like your story and character Amy
check your work before posting
want to hear about the next part of your story
Mrs S.K