Hi Jinan,
Lots of descriptive detail to your action here and I like the way you address the reader directly to make them feel like they are part of your story.
Remember to make things complete you need to try and link things to the start- I still want to know what happens next to Sneak.
Mrs M
Hi Jinan,
Lots of descriptive detail to your action here and I like the way you address the reader directly to make them feel like they are part of your story.
Remember to make things complete you need to try and link things to the start- I still want to know what happens next to Sneak.
Mrs M