STAR: I really like your adjectives and your description you also described the character
STAR: I like when you left it on suspense!
Wish: You should use capital letters after a full stop
from her. she
Oh my Kerem! You have used wonderful descriptive language to create a beautiful mood in this piece of writing that really draws your reader in; I especially like the way you used simile and metaphor to create atmosphere.
Remember to use and apostrophe to show possession. ( our heroine’s clothes)
I enjoyed reading this lots.
Mrs M
STAR: I really like your adjectives and your description you also described the character
STAR: I like when you left it on suspense!
Wish: You should use capital letters after a full stop
from her. she
Oh my Kerem! You have used wonderful descriptive language to create a beautiful mood in this piece of writing that really draws your reader in; I especially like the way you used simile and metaphor to create atmosphere.
Remember to use and apostrophe to show possession. ( our heroine’s clothes)
I enjoyed reading this lots.
Mrs M