Oh my Hafsa, what a wonderful start to your story, I love the way you used such beautiful descriptive language to draw me in and then the way you turned things around.
Next time remember to add commas when you pause.
I really enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
Oh my Hafsa, what a wonderful start to your story, I love the way you used such beautiful descriptive language to draw me in and then the way you turned things around.
Next time remember to add commas when you pause.
I really enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M