Oh my Gia, what a wonderful start to your story! I love the way you used descriptive detail and thought to draw me into your story and leave me wanting to know more; the sign of a talented writer.
Next time check your punctuation before you publish, I can see some questions that need punctuating.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
Oh my Gia, what a wonderful start to your story! I love the way you used descriptive detail and thought to draw me into your story and leave me wanting to know more; the sign of a talented writer.
Next time check your punctuation before you publish, I can see some questions that need punctuating.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
thank you mrs moore I will remember to do that next time and to read over my work,
thank you