I love that you used lots of description and I love that you used every colour of the rainbow for your verses. You should of used a darker yellow because it is hard to read. 🙂
that was an amazing poem, I really enjoyed reading it.
To improve you can maybe make it rhyme a bit more,
other than that I thought that your layout was amazing and the ending was the best.
well done 🙂
I like your phrases, including my blanket smells of feelings and emotions. Improve your writing by changing your font:I cannot read the yellow paragraph properly 😀
FROM KASHYAP
I like it a lot of rhyme very goood
This work is really good I like how you put an atmosphere
Yusuf
5a
I really like it great effort.
This creates lots of emotion.
by 5a
THIS IS REALLY GOOD BUT IT DOESN’T QUITE MAKE SENSE ”but of course I’ll tell it secrets”
READ IT OVER AGAIN
5B
For a second there i throght your blanket smells
I really like the first verse and also the nice rhymes you implemented
next time use more wow words and adjectives
from kerem
Great use of description. Maybe when you write in colours, try not to use yellow because it can be hardtop read. 🙂
sorry, I meant; hard to read
good use of description
when you write in colour use darker colours. Try not to use yellow as it is not easy to read.
THE WRITING IS A BIT SMALL AND YOU USED YELLOW FOR THE FONT THAT DIDN’T REALLY STAND OUT YOU SHOULD PRESENT YOUR WORK BOLD AND CLEAR
Good work! 🙂
Try to use ‘ SPAMO’
Simile
Personification
Adjectives
Metaphors
Onomatopoeia
on the second verse I cant tell if the yellow is showing. you poem is good, you have a beet in you poem.
I love that you used lots of description and I love that you used every colour of the rainbow for your verses. You should of used a darker yellow because it is hard to read. 🙂
that was an amazing poem, I really enjoyed reading it.
To improve you can maybe make it rhyme a bit more,
other than that I thought that your layout was amazing and the ending was the best.
well done 🙂
(: I like how you described how your blanket smells!
(: You used descriptive words!
Next time you should describe different features of your blanket!
I like your phrases 🙂
The colours make it a bit hard to read 🙁
I liked your adjectives 🙂
I like your phrases, including my blanket smells of feelings and emotions. Improve your writing by changing your font:I cannot read the yellow paragraph properly 😀
FROM KASHYAP
Tremendous phrases like My blanket smells as fresh as tufts of grass:)
The font colours makes it hard to read:(
Great word choice like alter:D
Tremendous phrases like My blanket smells as fresh as tufts of grass 🙂
The font colours makes it hard to read 🙁
Great word choice like alter 😀
🙂 I like how you described the blanket.
(:I thing next time don’t use yellow colour writing…
🙁 Do not use unreadable colours
🙂 Good description
🙁 spellings
🙂
The description made me understand how the blanket is.
I couldn’t understand the yellow part
Well done 🙂
I really like your similes
Well done 🙂
I really like your similes and the description