I really like your work but you need to work on your punctuation because you used capital letters for no reason and you had to use an apostrophe for were in the first line. 🙂
I think you should work on your punctuation. I noticed capitals in random places. I know you tried to use repetition, but it didn’t really work and it just seems like you didn’t notice how many times you repeated the same sentence. But your description was good.
work on your punctuation. Full stops needed.
Be careful as you never put spaces between some of your words.
Try not to repeat things over and over again.
🙂
A VERY GOOD AND GOOD USE OF VOCABULARY
Wow I am really impressed but check your work.
fantastic I just think you must check your spellings
good to see you describing the blanket but i think you should check your blanket poem
That was really good I like how you tried to make it rhyme at the beginning
to make it even better you can look over your work 🙂
I really like your work but you need to work on your punctuation because you used capital letters for no reason and you had to use an apostrophe for were in the first line. 🙂
You need to lay it out like a poem
read over your work when you are done
I think you should work on your punctuation. I noticed capitals in random places. I know you tried to use repetition, but it didn’t really work and it just seems like you didn’t notice how many times you repeated the same sentence. But your description was good.
Try to check your work, Check your spellings 🙂
work on your punctuation. Full stops needed.
Be careful as you never put spaces between some of your words.
Try not to repeat things over and over again.
🙂
I am really impressed with your work it was amazing.