Junior that was very descriptive I liked how you described the ocean blanket and used this sentence-the wobbly waves gave her the effect that she was on an never-ending rollercoaster. use full stops especially on short sentences instead of using commas. 🙂
Hi Junior,
I really enjoyed reading this, especially your vivid description of the blanket at the end. Describing the princess’ reactions also helped influence my opinion of the stony-eyed man.
Next time think about paragraphing, it will help your reader to organise events.
Well done.
Mrs M
junior I thought the princess was cold not warm but I do like the way you described the way the prinsess
Junior was describing the wool blanket not the princess if you look again he actually wrote this, in a warm, snug, wool blanket.
Great description:)
Tremendous similes:)
Looks unfinished 🙁
WE LIKE HOW YOU DESCRIBED THE BLANKET.
You should of put more punchuation
Cool I like this maybe you can try it without rhyming.
Junior that was very descriptive I liked how you described the ocean blanket and used this sentence-the wobbly waves gave her the effect that she was on an never-ending rollercoaster. use full stops especially on short sentences instead of using commas. 🙂
oh wow this is actually really good keep up the good work J
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Hi Junior,
I really enjoyed reading this, especially your vivid description of the blanket at the end. Describing the princess’ reactions also helped influence my opinion of the stony-eyed man.
Next time think about paragraphing, it will help your reader to organise events.
Well done.
Mrs M