Good work Zaeem, I like how you described the way Mary tossed her husband out the window. You’ve also used a great cliff-hanger. Your wish from me is to use more ways to create a tense description for Mary setting fire to the house.
S-You have written like the author. S-You have written short sentences and used commas for affects. W-Try use more dramatic sentences.
s: nice description s: great cliff hanger w: try to include more short sentances
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Good work Zaeem, I like how you described the way Mary tossed her husband out the window.
You’ve also used a great cliff-hanger.
Your wish from me is to use more ways to create a tense description for Mary setting fire to the house.
S-You have written like the author.
S-You have written short sentences and used commas for affects.
W-Try use more dramatic sentences.
s: nice description
s: great cliff hanger
w: try to include more short sentances