What a start Aalia! I love your techniques of writing. I like how you’ve used commas. Just make sure you follow a bit more of the success criteria.
I really liked your description of Mary’s actions. Your use of comas was very good. Maybe you can describe how she knocked on the door.
And also you can also describe the car like what the colour was and what the size was.
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What a start Aalia! I love your techniques of writing. I like how you’ve used commas. Just make sure you follow a bit more of the success criteria.
I really liked your description of Mary’s actions. Your use of comas was very good. Maybe you can describe how she knocked on the door.
And also you can also describe the car like what the colour was and what the size was.