Good job Krish, you have described her plot on killing the police ( food poisoning ). You have made your setting a mystery like a horror story. You have also included the side effects and issues of what the food poisoning may cause. Next time try to add more features of the setting and use more verbs and adverbs. 🙂
draw is spelt drawer you wrote as if you were drawing and you missed a comma.
Like how you done the ending krish, it gives more tension in your work.
Well done keep the good work up
Good job Krish, you have described her plot on killing the police ( food poisoning ). You have made your setting a mystery like a horror story. You have also included the side effects and issues of what the food poisoning may cause. Next time try to add more features of the setting and use more verbs and adverbs. 🙂
S: great description.
S: great words.
W: more speech
draw is spelt drawer you wrote as if you were drawing and you missed a comma.
Like how you done the ending krish, it gives more tension in your work.
Well done keep the good work up