You’ve used a good amount of tension to make me think about what happens next.
The story really links to the story of Roald Dahl.
Try and check your punctuation and keep spaces between your sentences.
Keep up the good work!
Star: You have used the authors style well using varies punctuation to make your work flow.
Star: You have used Marys thoughts well.
Wish: CHECK YOUR WORK!!! 🙂
You’ve used a good amount of tension to make me think about what happens next.
The story really links to the story of Roald Dahl.
Try and check your punctuation and keep spaces between your sentences.
Keep up the good work!
Star: You have used the authors style well using varies punctuation to make your work flow.
Star: You have used Marys thoughts well.
Wish: CHECK YOUR WORK!!! 🙂