Jayanna amazing work you have made!
S-you have made the reader involved by using a rhetorical question
S-you have used commas for suspense and created atmosphere and included detailed description too
W-Try and add more adjectives
Layla
<3 🙂 Xx
* Well done! You have included speech and detail, making it clearer to the reader .
*You have used rhetorical questions to engage the reader
Wish- Add more adjectives.
STAR=WELL DONE good use of vocab.
STAR=Your informal and formal language bounce of each other great.
WISH=Try to make your sentences more complex.
Jayanna amazing work you have made!
S-you have made the reader involved by using a rhetorical question
S-you have used commas for suspense and created atmosphere and included detailed description too
W-Try and add more adjectives
Layla
<3 🙂 Xx
* Well done! You have included speech and detail, making it clearer to the reader .
*You have used rhetorical questions to engage the reader
Wish- Add more adjectives.