I like it Merwan. I think that you could use less semi colons so you don’t make it really boring. I said this because using connectives is part of our writing skills!!!! The good thing about it is that you used the idea of our game that we play named survivors, the game I absolutely loved played. I liked the simile that you put in laughing like a hyena; you reminded me the laugh I made up and you, Utkarsh and Abhi made up my name as Hyena. I also like the setting Antarctica which is a good setting for the scientist. It was good that you used a popular animal penguin
I liked your story because you used lots of interesting vocabulary and loads of adjectives like laughing like a Hyena and perishing penguin and chilly and frosty sea and to make it more better you should use more interesting vocabulary and loads of more adjectives to make it more Awesome.
I like it Merwan. I think that you could use less semi colons so you don’t make it really boring. I said this because using connectives is part of our writing skills!!!! The good thing about it is that you used the idea of our game that we play named survivors, the game I absolutely loved played. I liked the simile that you put in laughing like a hyena; you reminded me the laugh I made up and you, Utkarsh and Abhi made up my name as Hyena. I also like the setting Antarctica which is a good setting for the scientist. It was good that you used a popular animal penguin
I enjoyed this different approach to the phrase, “…as it shivered…” Congratulations on creating a unique tale.
Thank you for your fair feedback like to hear from you soon
Thank you for your fair feedback I like to hear from you soon
I liked your story because you used lots of interesting vocabulary and loads of adjectives like laughing like a Hyena and perishing penguin and chilly and frosty sea and to make it more better you should use more interesting vocabulary and loads of more adjectives to make it more Awesome.