I like your story it is creating a picture in my head; I like it how you added eclipsis it is making it more interesting.
From Sara
Thanks Sara!
very amazing work, but no description on the house, and HOW it was scary! But I love the way you shovelled adventure and built a mountain from it
Sorry Imani, I didn’t have enough words to describe the house, but next time I will.
A great little tale, well done. I like the way you have used phrases to engage the reader, such as, “The family were gasping and breathing heavily and wearily.” I look forward to your next tale.
Thank you ever so much for that lovely comment, I will have another poem based on the World War One with my partner Anjali.
You’ve added a twist at the end which was great.
Thanks Alima
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I like your story it is creating a picture in my head; I like it how you added eclipsis it is making it more interesting.
From Sara
Thanks Sara!
very amazing work, but no description on the house, and HOW it was scary! But I love the way you shovelled adventure and built a mountain from it
Sorry Imani, I didn’t have enough words to describe the house, but next time I will.
A great little tale, well done. I like the way you have used phrases to engage the reader, such as, “The family were gasping and breathing heavily and wearily.” I look forward to your next tale.
Thank you ever so much for that lovely comment, I will have another poem based on the World War One with my partner Anjali.
You’ve added a twist at the end which was great.
Thanks Alima