This is a great tale, I especially liked the first line. Before posting your story just give it a final proof read to make sure their are no small errors that might reduce the overall quality of the work. Well done. I look forward to reading your next tale.
well done you used a lot of vocab and you used capital letters and fullstops
hi Naseem
I like your story it is amazing. I like how you have put in lots of semi colons. The setting was very terrifying. A haunted mansion!
This is a great tale, I especially liked the first line. Before posting your story just give it a final proof read to make sure their are no small errors that might reduce the overall quality of the work. Well done. I look forward to reading your next tale.