This is a fantastic piece of writing. I really love how you have described the octopi! The last part of your story seems really tense and I like that! Could you use a simile in your writing? This would engage the reader and make sure that they are really interested in what you are writing. Mr Stringer
This is a fantastic piece of writing. I really love how you have described the octopi! The last part of your story seems really tense and I like that! Could you use a simile in your writing? This would engage the reader and make sure that they are really interested in what you are writing. Mr Stringer
I really enjoyed reading your work , do you think you can do anything to make it more interesting?
Really good I like your story
really good work I really enjoyed it.
hello, I love the tense part at the end,did the octupses survive? fantastic
that is fantastic work. I cant wait to hear what happens next.
from sofia
Great story! Really enjoyed reading it but you can add lots more WOW words to make your story even better.
sup great work good use of connectives
great work