A great piece of writing, you have carefully selected your words and used dialogue with good effect. A great first tale, I look forward to reading more stories from you.
Hello Zia Its Somran
Well done! I really liked how you started your story it was very nice
Next time make sure to not add to many characters it was a bit hard to remember who was who
Keep it up!!!:)
From Somran
Thank you for all your appreciative comments.
Also thank you for your suggestions, I’ll definitely take them on board and apply it in my next piece of writing.
Zia
Very good work Zia, the sentence I liked was when they saw a beam of red fire, and you had used a good use of descriptive language. Well done.
By Zaeem
Well done Zia, great use of speech and precise word choices to draw in your reader. Remember to say who says what.
A great piece of writing, you have carefully selected your words and used dialogue with good effect. A great first tale, I look forward to reading more stories from you.
Hello Zia Its Somran
Well done! I really liked how you started your story it was very nice
Next time make sure to not add to many characters it was a bit hard to remember who was who
Keep it up!!!:)
From Somran
Thank you for all your appreciative comments.
Also thank you for your suggestions, I’ll definitely take them on board and apply it in my next piece of writing.
Zia
Very good work Zia, the sentence I liked was when they saw a beam of red fire, and you had used a good use of descriptive language. Well done.
By Zaeem