Hi Zaynab,
I love the way you used detail to imply things about your character and referred to prior events to centre him well in the action; this is the sign of a talented writer.
Next time try to organise into clear paragraphs.
I enjoyed reading this Mrs M
Hi Zaynab,
I love the way you used detail to imply things about your character and referred to prior events to centre him well in the action; this is the sign of a talented writer.
Next time try to organise into clear paragraphs.
I enjoyed reading this Mrs M