Hi Rehana
This is an interesting way to move the story on and introduce your hero; I especially like the way you have given us background detail that connect him to events that have already occurred.
Think about adapting your language to suit the type of story you are writing.
Mrs m
Hi Rehana
This is an interesting way to move the story on and introduce your hero; I especially like the way you have given us background detail that connect him to events that have already occurred.
Think about adapting your language to suit the type of story you are writing.
Mrs m
Rehana I like the way you used very interesting words to suck people into your story well done I think you deserve a star
thanks for your comment 😀