The Crews Decent By Junior and Olimaran

2 Responses to The Crews Decent By Junior and Olimaran

1. nanand says:

   July 7, 2016 at 9:38 am

   Hi Boys,
   This was a great read. Some fab precise detail to paint a picture in my mind.
   Watch tenses, you’re jumping between past and present.
   Well done.
   Mrs M

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2. Losheni.M says:

   July 7, 2016 at 10:07 am

   Hi Junior and Olimaran
   Like Mrs Moore has said, you’re switching between past and present tense however the detail and language techniques used makes the text eye-catching. Keep up the good work..
   Losheni

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