Oh my Pavan and Amelie,
This was a great read; some excellent description and use of varied devices to draw me in.
I can see some homophone spelling errors and missing apostrophes. Remember to always check these.
Well done.
Mrs M
Hi Pavan and Amelie
A wide range of language techniques such as triplets have been used to grab the reader’s attention.
Apart from a few spelling errors, your work is fantastic…Well done.
Losheni
Oh my Pavan and Amelie,
This was a great read; some excellent description and use of varied devices to draw me in.
I can see some homophone spelling errors and missing apostrophes. Remember to always check these.
Well done.
Mrs M
Hi Pavan and Amelie
A wide range of language techniques such as triplets have been used to grab the reader’s attention.
Apart from a few spelling errors, your work is fantastic…Well done.
Losheni