Well done Imani and Liyana you did very well and the main thing was you used a lot of vocabulary as well. You could of added some similes and semi colons as well but other than that you did exceedingly well.
from Annais
What an calm and fantastic poem Imani! you don’t really need anything to improve this poem. oh yea and at the end I dint really get it when you said ” please were poppies today?” because you added question mark I don’t get it I mean isn’t it meant to be so please wear poppies today. But other than fabulous work!
from sophia
An AMAZING story I don’t think you need any things at all to fix it you should be really proud of your self.
I like how you made it rhyme and I also like how you made it descriptive and I also like how you put a question mark!
This poem is so rhyming and it brings a story to minds ; it goes from happy birds to pistil guns and bombs!
Love T’ea
Well done Imani and Liyana you did very well and the main thing was you used a lot of vocabulary as well. You could of added some similes and semi colons as well but other than that you did exceedingly well.
from Annais
Thanks Annais
Fabulous Imani and Liyana, I like how you rhymed the poem. You girls used the vocabulary in the poem and also you added an omnomatocpia.
What an calm and fantastic poem Imani! you don’t really need anything to improve this poem. oh yea and at the end I dint really get it when you said ” please were poppies today?” because you added question mark I don’t get it I mean isn’t it meant to be so please wear poppies today. But other than fabulous work!
from sophia
I loved the poem because it was full of things solider and it shows a lot of emotions and its full of sad words so you 2 wrote a touching poem