The poem is fabulous, when you said “They are the soldiers for our lives and heartbeat”, my heart pounced. Well done T’ea and Annais you should be proud of yourselves
An amazing try Tea and Annais, I loved it when you talked about the poppies and the whole war but, some sentences did not make sense and you could improve it if you added more figurative language. Well Done!
This is a beautifully constructed poem. I love the use of words and phrases. This is a greatly designed, and the sentence structure is a fantastic way to build up. You have really done an amazing job. A masterpiece. Although you could improve by explaining how it was like. I particularly enjoyed “They are soldiers for our lives and heartbeat” and I thought it really added texture to the poem. A fab piece of work. I hope to see your next peice
fantastic story I liked the bit when you wrote “they are the soldiers for our lives and heartbeat” that part is the best you guys should be sooooooo proud of yourself.
Thank you for commenting on me and Tea story we really appreciate it so this is a thank you from both of us ; you have done some detailed comments…….. WOW.
I am really impressed with this poem it flows beautifully and has deep meaning. I didn’t know about the significance of the poppy and Tea and Annais has explained it well here. We don’t even notice the spelling as the poem has captured the feeling. This poem is a simple but effective reminder of what the soldiers did for the countries during the war. Well done girls
I like the idea of why you used the title the time to remember. Just check your spelling as you spelt solider wrong.
Okay I will check next time
love T’ea
The poem is fabulous, when you said “They are the soldiers for our lives and heartbeat”, my heart pounced. Well done T’ea and Annais you should be proud of yourselves
great that liked it the my heart is pounding with joy
love T’ea
Some sentences did not make sense Tea and Annais good attempt and great emotions.
That’s okay we all tried didn’t we
love T’ea
An amazing try Tea and Annais, I loved it when you talked about the poppies and the whole war but, some sentences did not make sense and you could improve it if you added more figurative language. Well Done!
From Ratheena
I will do next time thanks
love T’ea
I like the way you layed it out and put it in paragraphs but next time don’t use cemi colons to many times
okay I will do the connectives not the colons (a lot)
love T’ea
I like that you described their emotions but check your spelling mistakes other wise a really interesting story
will check
love T’ea
Good work. The first time you type soldiers you spell it wrong and the next time you spell it correct
okay I spell it write it was because of the spelling check?
love T’ea
This is a beautifully constructed poem. I love the use of words and phrases. This is a greatly designed, and the sentence structure is a fantastic way to build up. You have really done an amazing job. A masterpiece. Although you could improve by explaining how it was like. I particularly enjoyed “They are soldiers for our lives and heartbeat” and I thought it really added texture to the poem. A fab piece of work. I hope to see your next peice
Thank you, I will do the explaining
love T’ea
Annais and T’ea this is really good I think this would be a really good poem to read out to the whole class you should feel amazed of yourself!!!!
Thanks that means a lot that I am amazing at poems even though I have 2 of my poems in kids books
love T’ea
This is a really good poem and it is really creative as well I liked the way you described it.
I will keep describing with my creativity
love T’ea
fantastic story I liked the bit when you wrote “they are the soldiers for our lives and heartbeat” that part is the best you guys should be sooooooo proud of yourself.
Thank you for commenting on me and Tea story we really appreciate it so this is a thank you from both of us ; you have done some detailed comments…….. WOW.
I am really impressed with this poem it flows beautifully and has deep meaning. I didn’t know about the significance of the poppy and Tea and Annais has explained it well here. We don’t even notice the spelling as the poem has captured the feeling. This poem is a simple but effective reminder of what the soldiers did for the countries during the war. Well done girls