Zebras Life

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4 Responses to Zebras Life

  1. Mrs P (Team 100WC) says:

    Hi there
    I am glad you gave this 100WC a go. You used all the words to create the story. I wonder if you re-read your writing as parts of it didn’t make sense. It is important to edit your work so it is easier for the reader. Keep on writing.
    Mrs P (Team 100WC)
    Wellington, New Zealand

  2. Janet Team 100WC says:

    There is so much happening in your story, Anojan. You easily manage to fit in all the prompt words. I love he idea of the cactus making yellow goo that made the zebra uncomfortable. It does not sound very nice at all. Your story flows very well. I can imagine the zebra making his way around the desert and meeting all these different animals.

  3. Cath (Team100, Melbourne, Australia) says:

    Hello, this is a very interesting story. Your first sentence grabs the reader’s interest as it is so different. I wanted to read on to find out what was going to happen. There was certainly a lot of action in your story. It was great that you were able to use all the challenge words. Well done.

  4. Jiping says:

    Anojan, you make a response to this week’s prompt with all the words provided. I could find that those animals were really friendly as they were willing to give a hand to the zebra. My suggestion is that you can add more detail to the story to make it more clear. Keep on writing! J.

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